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Topic/Postby Sarawr » 22 May 2012, 10:54

Shift key is your friend, also might want to edit the story a bit in regards of grammar as well, along with the dialogue. Excessive use of dots in speech is unnecessary, and only useful if the person in question trails of; for example, not finishing a sentence but the thought still remains, or a question hangs in the air that is predictable for the reader to guess that there is no need to write it at all.

For example the human speaking slowly in your story. We already know he speaks like that so there is no need for the dots in between each word to enhance the effect.

Fixing all that and I am sure it will be easier to read afterwards.
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