Colder than the embrace of death

Take a look into the life of a not-so-ordninary servant of the light!

Topic/Postby zerkesh » 21 Feb 2016, 14:07

Perfect reading to accompany my breakfast, munching down on a piece of bacon as I read the "Get me a fucking meal" part!

As for criticism the only thing I can think of is that you like the word "She" as an opener to sentences too much, try varying up the sentence structure so you don't end up having 5 sentences in a row starting with the same word ^^
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