Sven's little holiday

It's happy hour, the alcohol is flowing. It's time to pull up a tankard of ale, bottle of wine for the ladies and regail tales of heroism and grandeur.

Topic/Postby Gergel » 25 Aug 2016, 11:21

And then Sven finds himself feeling peckish and gets a nice delicious bite to eat. Pirate, extra rare. And possibly a girl for dessert. Yum. Oops.

I'd like to offer a suggestion. Pick a tense and stick with it. Right now you keep switching back and forth between present and past. "Sven does this, then Sven did that, then the pirate does the other thing."
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